Wednesday, October 6, 2010

Air pollution (Drafting essay)



                  Pollution crisis is a major problem all around the world. It has adversely affected the lives of millions of people and caused many deaths and health disorders.There are basically 3 types of pollution.They are :air pollution ,
water pollution and land pollution. I will talk about air pollution .
          Air pollution is the material ,whether chemicals or biological materials, that is introduced into the atmosphere by humans or human products.
Each year industrially developed countries generate billions of tons of pollutants.
          But what are the causes of air pollution?
Air pollution is caused by a wide variety of things. Cars,trucks,jet airplanes and other engine vehicles cause air pollution. This type of air pollution creates smog causes health problems and holes in the ozone layer. Factories and power generating stations burn fossil fuels , which cause air pollution.
          What about the effects ?.Some of the activities of man produce greenhouse gases. The balance of the greenhouse gases changes and this has effects on the whole of the planet.
Because there are more greenhouse gases ,more heat is trapped which makes the Earth warmer .This is known as GLOBAL WARMING.
The changes in climate will affect everyone ,but
some populations will be at great risk.For example,countries whose coasstal regions have a large population ,such as Egypt , may see whole populations move inland to avoid flood risk areas.
        As we see there is a fast increase in air
pollution in Egypt , so we have to do something to restore healthier environment.the first step is to increase awareness among the people . The second step is to make the environmental protection a national priority.

         It is high time that we take this issue of problems of pollution seriously ,or it could have adverse effects on our future generatins.

6 comments:

  1. your essay contains valuable inf , but it is on Q and A. Ido not think it is a technique of writing essay. thanks

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  2. your essay is good ,but i have some comment.firstly:you wrote literally.
    secondly:you don't have to say (i will write,i will talk,.....)write directly
    good luck

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  3. hi sara you wrote awanderful essay ,but you should focus more on tenses.
    (Air pollution is caused by a wide variety of things. Cars,trucks,jet airplanes and other engine vehicles cause air pollution)you should use conjunctions in order not to repeat.
    good work

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  4. your essay is good.it has avarious ideas, but you shoudnot use question at the first of every paragraph, you can use varied sentences in length and structure.

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  5. good work sarah your essay is very good ,your words are simple ,your style is good ,but try to make your essay shorter

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  6. Pollution crisis is a major problem all around the world. It has adversely affected the lives of millions of people and caused many deaths and health disorders.There are basically 3 types of pollution.They are :air pollution ,
    water pollution and land pollution. I will talk about air pollution .
    Air pollution is the material ,whether chemicals or biological materials, that is introduced into the atmosphere by humans or human products.
    Each year industrially developed countries generate billions of tons of pollutants.(
    But what are the causes of air pollution?
    Air pollution is caused by a wide variety of things. Cars,trucks,jet airplanes and other engine vehicles cause air pollution. This type of air pollution creates smog (that) causes health problems and (widens the) hole(s) in the ozone layer. Factories and power generating stations burn fossil fuels , which cause air pollution.
    What about the effects ?.Some of the activities of man produce greenhouse gases. The balance of the greenhouse gases changes and this has effects on the whole (of the )planet.
    Because there are more greenhouse gases ,more heat is trapped which makes the Earth warmer .This is known as GLOBAL WARMING.
    The changes in climate will affect everyone ,but
    some populations will be at great risk.For example,countries whose coastal(wrong spelling) regions have a large population ,such as Egypt , may see whole populations move inland to avoid flood risk areas.
    As we see there is a fast increase in air
    pollution in Egypt , so we have to do something to restore healthier environment.the first step is to increase awareness among the people . The second step is to make the environmental protection a national priority.
    It is high time that we take this issue of problems of pollution seriously ,or it could have adverse effects on our future generatins( I don’t understand this sentence).

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